Writing Advice #49: POV Addendum

So, a while back I wrote a lengthy post on point of view. It was chock full of info and you should go read it before proceeding any further. I’ll wait.

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Back? Great!

Recently, someone left the following comment on that post:

Thank goodness I found this site!

I’m writing an ebook series which I have not published quite yet. But the first will be out Dec.

I had a question maybe people are willing to help me with. I’m wanting to use First Person Multiple. I didn’t know what it was called until I read this site.

I’ve written the first two ebooks 1st POV from only one character’s point of view. I’m editing the third now, and I want to switch between 2 characters in different scenes. In trying to consistent with first 2 ebook, is there any way to do this while using 1st person?

Can a writer, wanting to use first person, start a scene in third person saying person’s name then quickly switch to first. For example, “Ace stepped slowly to the creek.” Then switch to first person, “I stared into the water feeling lost.”

In the next chapter, I would change characters and say, “Amen squinted at the horde of Undead charging. I swallowed, my body stiffening, preparing for the onslaught to come.”

Or are there better examples of how to do this?

Well, as I like to say, the only thing that really matters in writing a book is not what you do, but that you do it well. If you can pull off such a scheme as you have above and do it with skill, then fine.

But I have to be honest with you — it seems extremely clumsy to me. It’s going to throw off readers, jar them.

First Person Multiple is simple. Look, all you need to do is give the reader some kind of trigger that indicates you’ve switched from Character A to Character B. Something simple, like…



I was looking over the fog bank from my perch high atop Glassfoam Peak when I noticed…

And then, when you get to the chapter from another POV…



The clouds, their underbellies dun colored with dirty rain, parted just enough that far ahead in the distance I bespied the green-glowing angles of Glassfoam Peak…

Done and done. Sometimes authors will use different fonts to indicate different characters (Jodi Picoult does this, for example), but fonts are tricky to mess with in an e-book, so I don’t recommend that path.

Above all, though, remember this: Your greatest asset when writing First Person Multiple is making the characters’ voices distinctive! Theoretically, once you establish your characters for the readers, the reader should be able to tell the difference without any clues whatsoever…because each character speaks differently, describes things differently, etc.

Good luck!

What’s Your Point of View?

A month or so ago, I received an e-mail that said:

I am about a third of though the way through your novel, I Hunt Killers, and am hooked – real page turner. I just wondered why you chose to write in third person? The title is in first person, so I suppose I went in with different expectations. But as a reader, the distance created by the third person narrator is frustrating at times. So can you help me resolve my feelings? Just curious, not criticism, again I am very much hooked. Thank you! [Read more…]